My childhood novel: The Bag Basher

When I was younger I loved writing stories.

I was always writing short stories and poems. I’m sure that if I was to go back to my mum’s house and look in wardrobes and under my old bed that I would find lots more. 

A while back, I was looking through some old stuff in my apartment and I found a book that I’d written. The Bag Basher, my first novel (hmmmm) was written when I was eleven years old.  

It’s really taken me back in time. The story is rather tragic. I’m sure a psycologist would have a field-day interpreting what it means. Basically, the story is ‘violence meets a touch-of-campness’. Read on and make of it what you will. Happy Reading.

Chapter 1:

Mrs Brambleberry was the worst type of woman who you would like to be with because she was always bashing people. This had gone on for about one year now and the postman was considering leaving. He looked so bad with all his bruises, all over his body. Each time he’s tried to post big letters he had to fold them in half. SHE DIDN’T LIKE IT. She would just stomp out of the house and hit him.

In her back garden people said she must grow handbags because she had so many. One day she would carry a green one, the next day it would be blue.

Anyway, let’s get to the point. She had a nephew called Jeremy Stimple and it was the summer holidays, so he was coming to stay with her.

When he came, she was nowhere to be seen. He looked all over but she was not there. This started his mind going. “Where are you Aunty?” he shouted, but there was no answer.

As soon as he went round into her back garden, there she was with her handbag tree.

Stick with it… It gets very exciting! Who’d have believed in handbag trees.

Chapter 2

By now he had started to wonder what she was doing because when he came she didn’t even say hello to him. Next to Mrs Brambleberry was a little chemistry set.

She dropped a little bit of solution onto a branch of the tree and a little bag grew.

“Aunt”, Jeremy shouted, “It’s me”. But she didn’t look.

That night they were both very tired and went straight to their beds.

It was about 12 o’clock at night when two evil-looking men smashed the back window and crept into the house. The both had brown bags and started to pick things up.

Mrs Brambleberry started to cough in bed. She got up and went downstairs. On the way to the kitchen she thought to herself “Where’s my picture? Oh well, I must have moved it and then forgotten.”

The burglars both said “Cor, we were lucky, but we had better get down again before she comes back”.

When she went back to bed they started stealing things again. In one corner of the room there was a big golden bag. Mrs Brambleberry probably used it when she went to dinner. They quickly put it into their sack. By now it was 1 o’clock and so they left.

In the morning Jeremy came down into the front room to watch TV. The only problem was….there was no television set nor any of his aunt’s things. He quickly looked out of the back window and saw footprints in the sandpit and a piece of black and white material. This was when he knew what had happened. They had been Robbed! (Notice my use of a capital letter – I was really emphasing the event!)

Could this story be more stereotypical if it tried? Okay, so it all seems rather predictable, but black and white robber material? What!? What was I thinking? Tragic – hope you’re enjoying it so far.

Chapter 3

Jeremy just couldn’t believe his eyes. He ran upstairs and into his Aunt’s room shouting “Aunt you’ve been robbed!”

When she woke up she said “Calm down now, you must have had a bad dream”.

“No, no, I’ve just been downstairs to watch TV but there’s nothing there”.

They both went downstairs to find an empty room. “Aaaargh” she screamed. “Phone the police!”

They phoned the police and then went on a burgulars trail. It was quite easy because they found a trail on Aunt’s beads on the floor. “They must have fallen out of my jewellery box when they ran away”, she said. Everything they found they put into a carrier bag so that they could take them home. Eventually they got to the very last bead and thought that they’d lost the trail, but they were wrong. The trail had stopped by a thorn bush and there were tiny bits of black and white material caught – so they followed it.

Mrs Brambleberry went right through the bush and sat down in dismay. There she found a secret map.

Seriously!?? Black and white material. I can’t believe that the 11 year old me really thought that people wore black and white when breaking into houses… Oh oh. So – How will it end? What do you think is going to happen in the fourth and final chapter?

Chapter 4

Mrs Brambleberry clearly understood the map and she went into the tree-house (which was in the map). She found the secret rope and got inside. Once inside, she was struck dumb.

Where are the thieves? she thought.

Jeremy came running in and said “Look around. There must be a trapdoor somewhere. We’re upstairs. It’s only upstairs”.

They searched for ages bu they couldn’t find the trapdoor until Jeremy spotted a piece of carpet out of place – and underneath they found the trapdoor.

It was hard to open but eventually they opened it and caught the thieves. Mrs Brambleberry got all her things back.

THE END

P.S. Before the thieves were put into prison, Mrs Brambleberry poshly smashed them in the face 100 times with her handbags.

Oh – A happy ending. Well, for some. It was all too easy. The shortest chapter seems to indicate that I’d lost a certain level of interest in the story.

As for ‘poshly smashing them in the face with handbags…’ All I can say it  – Don ‘t get on the wrong side of Mrs B.

I hope you enjoyed it. I hope it made you giggle. It was a long time ago when I wrote it. Such innocence.

And –

Just in case you wondered… I wrote a sequel three years later.

I might share it with you all one day.

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21 thoughts on “My childhood novel: The Bag Basher

  1. Move OVER, Agatha Cristie, there’s a new super sluth on the block!

    Yes I bet those Robbers were wearing black and white striped pyjama style suits…
    … (just like all “bad guys” in the Movies look menacing, have facial scars and wear black) … inconspicuous (NOT).all ready to be apprehended by the police and taken to jail.
    What a giggle.. and how sweet and innocent the writing is…. notice the “convenient” bead trail too LOL.
    SEQUEL? Oh yes please!

  2. I loved your story and laughed so hard when you said..”Anyway, lets get to the point”. Almost as if even your 11 year old self knew you were just rambling on.
    And you had such wonderful writing for an 11 year old (or for any age for that matter).

    I wish you could publish this just for kicks. I’d buy it!…the mental image of a crabby old lady bashing people in the face with handbags is hilarious.

    • Oh, I certainly knew that I was rambling on. I think I must have read a book which included something along those lines (where the author ‘connects’ with the reader). I just wonder who the character Mrs B was based on…….

    • Thank you for stopping by. If this was the first of my posts which you have read then goodness knows what you must think of my blog. It’s all very varied here. Come again.

      And – thanks for commenting! x

  3. I actually think this was pretty good (until, as you point out, you clearly got bored with the whole story!). It kind of falls apart at the end but chapters 1 and 2 were great!

    This reminds me of some of the stuff I used to write. I had one called “My Strange Nightmare” which was something about being shipwrecked, I think. Your convenient trail of beads reminded me of some of the unsubtle plot devices I used too (I think at one point my characters had to get out of a well, so I suddenly remembered that one of them had a “really long scarf”).

    But I was a bit of a weird kid. When I was 12 I entered a local story/poetry writing competition on the subject of “The Family”. Everyone else wrote about how lovely families are. I wrote about a woman in Communist Russia whose son betrays her to Stalin. (I presume we’d just been doing it in history).

    At least yours has a happy ending!

  4. Oh my word, I LOVED this. You had me laughing from the first line. Did you really write this when you were eleven? It’s amazing! And honestly, though you’ve berated yourself for being predictable, I found your heroine to be the most unique crime solver I’ve read. The bag basher? Come on. Pure gold. And I could see your sweetness coming through with this line, “Everything they found they put into a carrier bag so that they could take them home.” That’s so nice. You can tell you cared about your characters, and respected their possessions.

    Your villans were thieves. Your hero/heroine was a family team of aunt and nephew. Look at your priorities. You shouldn’t think poorly of this story. I really enjoyed it, and it speaks a lot about your character.

    • I’m so glad that you enjoyed it. I really did write it all those years ago. I really enjoyed typing it all onto my computer. It brought back some funny memories.
      Such sweetness and innocence. That’s true.
      I really am a family guy. My family were so important to me. I think the woman is the main feisty character because I grew up with my mum. Although, my mum would never go out bashing the postman. She may have liked to.

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